Thread:KyleAsherSPerea03/@comment-15259580-20160608032021

First of all, improve your formatting, punctuation, capitalization, spelling, creativity and grammar in your cases.

Second of all, the plot in your cases isn't even a plot at all! You just put the crime scene, victim, killer and next location there! NO EXPLANATION OF THE KILLER'S MOTIVE! NO POST-INVESTIGATION! You must improve that.

Third of all, does your World Edition even have a story? Are you just putting Grimsborough and Pacific Bay suspects as suspects for no reason at all? Answer me.

Lastly, http://criminal-case-official-fanfiction.wikia.com/wiki/Thread:14473

This thread is what you need.

My rating for your series 1.5/10. If you improved your grammar, spelling, etc., you might get more positive feedback.

That's all. 